The bar chart shows the percentage of elderly citizens in three countries in 1980, 2000, and 2030

The graph above represents the demographic trend of three different countries in the

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1980, 2000, and 2030,

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of people above 65 years old in percentage.

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, the proportion of elderly in each country indicates an upward trend in each presented year. In 1980 and 2000, Canada and Germany had a similar pattern of rising elderly

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; 5% each.

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in 2030 Germany consistently shows the same percentage of increase, from 20% to 25%, Canada only grows approximately 2%. Amongst all, the slightest growth

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of old population

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appeared in the

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. Within 50 years, there is only

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population across the

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highlights that the

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predicted

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to contribute less than 20% of

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generation in 2030.

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2030 make a significant gap between the

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and other countries mentioned, which has

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% difference

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Germany.