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With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?

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Oil
 and
gas
 have been the most prominent sources of
energy
 for various industries like automobiles, electricity production, etc. In recent times, there has been a significant increase in the global demand for
oil
 and
gas
. The increasing demand but limited supply of
oil
 and
gas
 is popularizing the idea that the undiscovered parts of the world should be explored to get more access to these resources.
Although
 I agree that these undiscovered
areas
 might prove to be a great resource for
oil
 and
gas
, at the same,
it
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 can be detrimental to our earth’s natural diversity. These undiscovered
areas
 may be a rich source of
oil
 and
gas
, but until they are explored, their potential will remain ruled out. Middle Eastern countries were once an undiscovered resource of
oil
, but now they are global leaders in
oil
 supply. Researchers and scientists can do their studies and tests to see if these undiscovered
areas
 can be mined for
oil
 and
gas
. In case they are successful, it will help to deal with the ever-increasing global need.
On the contrary
, these activities might affect
mother nature
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Mother Nature
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 which can be extremely harmful. Exploiting new undiscovered
areas
 can
further
 pollute our environment which in itself is a big problem for the modern world.
For instance
, part of the exploring process will be cutting down trees. As history has taught us, toying with nature can lead to big disasters which we shall avoid at all costs.
To conclude
,
although
 opening up these undiscovered
areas
 may help with the current problem of shortage of
oil
 and
gas
, we should start looking for other renewable
energy
 sources as alternatives like solar
energy
, wind
energy
, and more. It will help us to build a better and sustainable world for our future generations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global demand
  • finite resources
  • energy consumption
  • exploiting
  • untouched ecosystems
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy solutions
  • geopolitical consequences
  • territorial disputes
  • dependency
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