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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework and household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line charts compare the variation in owning three different electrical home appliances
as well as
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 time spent by households in terms of housework in a nation from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, it is evident that the proportion of people owning home appliances increased throughout the period given,
whereas
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 the number of
hours
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 of housework per week decreased over the same period. As the graph shows, washing machines were the most popular among the two items in 1920, with 40%. Afterwards, it experienced a gradual increase until 1960, made up precisely 70% before falling to about 65% in 1980,
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 it climbed up gradually till 2019, accounting for roughly 75%.
However
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, the figure for refrigerators stood at about 4% in 1920.
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, it witnessed a gradual increase up to 1980, with 100% before levelling off exactly at 100% in 2019. Regarding vacuum cleaners, the figure was similar to refrigerators.
On the other hand
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, the number of
hours
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 of housework per week, per household went down over the period given. It started at 50
hours
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 in 1920, it
then
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 gradually decreased till 1980, with approximately 15
hours
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 before remained constant at about 15% from 1980 onwards.
Finally
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, it went down to roughly 10
hours
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 in 2019.
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