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You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter remind your employer what the course was about explain why the course was useful to you in your work suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other coleagues

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Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that I have undergone a
project
 related training for one week, and I felt the training will satisfy a purpose in my job. It is a
project
management
 course which is provided by
Project
Management
 Institute, USA. The chapters mostly focused on the scope preparations, scheduling of work and risk
management
 studies.
Moreover
, it was very easy to understand how to manage risk in the projects, and I find it is an effective
statergy
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strategy
. I believe
this
 course will help in
fullfiling
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fulfilling
 my work
responsibilites
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responsibilities
 because the new
project
 we are currently handling deals with these areas, and I could cover
up
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the
project
engineers
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 activities from now onward. I would like to suggest
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you
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that we
could
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provide first aid training for our other staff as they are regularly dealing with
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field work
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, and nowadays, there are many incidents
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 different sites so that medical training can be given more priority
instead
 of providing a
project
management
 course. Yours sincerely, James Wilson
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Consider providing more specific examples or details to explain how the course content directly applies to your current work projects. This can strengthen your argument and provide a clearer rationale for its usefulness.
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Ensure your recommendations for the other staff's training needs are directly supported by specific incidents or examples. This will add credibility to your suggestions.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the clarity and flow of your ideas within paragraphs. Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea and transitions smoothly to the next.
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The letter effectively covers all points mentioned in the prompt, ensuring a complete response.
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You used a suitable and professional tone throughout the letter, making it appropriate for your audience.
coherence cohesion
Your letter opens and closes with appropriate greetings and sign-offs, maintaining a professional format.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • comprehensive overview
  • skill set
  • practical application
  • in-depth understanding
  • workplace efficiency
  • professional development
  • tailored to specific roles
  • learning curve
  • specialized training
  • focus areas
  • maximize productivity
  • content relevance
  • long-term implications
  • recommendations for improvement
  • feedback mechanism
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