The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the diagrams below.

The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called 

Pentland from 1950 to 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the 

diagrams below.
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The graph illustrates the modifications that have taken place in the Pentland coastal area between 1950 and 2007.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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only two things that remain the same which are the main road and the sea
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the top.
Moreover
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, a lot of new facilities are
constructed
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in
this
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town.
To begin
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with, A new
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pathway was built surrounding the sea and a yacht marina was used
instead
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of boats. Three apartments sprung up on the bottom right of the sea
as well as
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the old industrial area was replaced by a park, swimming pool and multi-story car park.
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, the old parking lot in the Northeast of the town was demolished.
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, the grassland on both sides of the main road was changed.
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, there were seven new stores, which divided into three on the left and four on the right of the main route, were set in. A new cinema and ten houses
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came up at the bottom of the map.
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, there are three small ways that were split out from the old middle road.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • coastal area
  • transformation
  • landscape
  • land use
  • infrastructure
  • environmental modifications
  • residential development
  • urban living spaces
  • commercial areas
  • recreational facilities
  • economic landscape
  • green spaces
  • natural habitats
  • urban expansion
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