The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the diagrams below.
The graph illustrates the modifications that have taken place in the Pentland coastal area between 1950 and 2007.
Overall
, it is clear that
only two things that remain the same which are the main road and the sea in
the top. Change preposition
at
Moreover
, a lot of new facilities are constructed
in Add a missing verb
being constructed
this
town.
To begin
with, A new semi-circle shaped
pathway was built surrounding the sea and a yacht marina was used Add a hyphen
semi-circle-shaped
instead
of boats. Three apartments sprung up on the bottom right of the sea as well as
the old industrial area was replaced by a park, swimming pool and multi-story car park. Furthermore
, the old parking lot in the Northeast of the town was demolished.
Additionally
, the grassland on both sides of the main road was changed. Firstly
, there were seven new stores, which divided into three on the left and four on the right of the main route, were set in. A new cinema and ten houses also
came up at the bottom of the map. Lastly
, there are three small ways that were split out from the old middle road.Submitted by nnatthinee on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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