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THe amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries.

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What has been depicted in the bar chart is how much
tea
 and
coffee
 is imported from four developed countries.
Overall
, the UK and the USA import more
tea
 than
coffee
,
whereas
 the reverse is true for
Canada
 and
Germany
.
Moreover
, the United Kingdom was the biggest importer of
tea
 among the four countries;
however
, the lowest importation of
tea
 and
coffee
 was dedicated to
Canada
 and the UK, respectively.   The largest proportion of the imported
tea
 was allocated to the UK,
according to
 160,000
tonnes
, followed by the USA (just below 120,000
tonnes
).
In contrast
,
Germany
 and
Canada
 bought significantly smaller quantities of
tea
, the former was four times less than the leading country in the chart, and the latter was 20,000
tonnes
. 
Germany
 and the United Kingdom were the largest and smallest importers of
coffee
, respectively, with imports from the United Kingdom accounting for half of
Germany
's imports (20,000).
Additionally
, the USA and
Canada
 experienced the same exact number, which was 40000
tonnes
.
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grammar
While the essay effectively describes the data in the bar chart, there are a few grammatical errors and inconsistencies. For instance, 'reverse is true for Canada and Germany' could be better phrased as 'the opposite is true for Canada and Germany'. Maintaining grammatical consistency can improve clarity.
structure
Consider adding a brief conclusion where you summarize the main findings. This can improve the overall coherence and cohesion of your essay.
content
Providing additional comparisons or insights could strengthen the analysis. For example, including why these differences in imports might exist would add depth to your essay.
content
The essay gives a clear and accurate description of the bar chart, with specific data points cited for each country, which strengthens the task achievement.
structure
Logical structure is very good, as the essay moves smoothly from an overall summary to specific details about each country's imports.

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