Many social media accounts are fake. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest?

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In these days and ages, there is a phenomenon that there are many
accounts
on the social
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are
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fabricated.
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problem is attributable to the misinformation and the scam on the network, but it can be tackled by
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strict censorship from the cybersecurity checkers. The underlying root of the problem is the increase
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misstatement
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misstatements
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of
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social media. To be more specific, these users will upload
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false news or
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gutter presses on these platforms in order to manipulate the citizen's awareness or increase the interaction on the networks.
Moreover
, some individuals used fake
accounts
for cheating
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in the election. Take the
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president in the USA as a prime example, many city-dwellers
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fake
account
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accounts
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to control the results of the election. Another factor may be the fraud on publicity, many
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tend to organize the group on social,
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they will use the influence of the legit organization in order to scam the money from users. As
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the legit organization will be notorious
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directly
. In Vietnam, there are many fraud cases which can be noticed
such
as donating for the
improvished
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impoverished
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area. They create a
websitet
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website
for donating and
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transfer
all the money to their own bank account.
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Perhaps
the effective solution to
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scratch
itch is that all the
posts
should be allowed by the check from the administrator. To explain that the
posts
from each individual must be allowed not only the principle of the public but
also
the authenticity. As
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results
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the
fake
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number of fake
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accounts
will decrease annually. As far
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, the moderator must investigate all the information from that
posts
if these
posts
do not reach the
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standard
of the
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principle
,
these
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content
moderator will cancel the post and ban the users. In conclusion,
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are many
accounts
on
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social
flatforms
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platforms
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are
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that are
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fabricated.
This
problem is attributable to the misinformation and the scam on the network, but it can be tackled by
the
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apply
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strict censorship from the cybersecurity checkers.
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