Some people believe that animals must be used for conducting laboratory tests, while other people think that animals are innocent creatures and we must not exploit them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People are calling into question using
animals
for conducting laboratory tests,
while
some individuals believe that we must
use
animals
for testing. Others assert that
animals
are innocent creatures and we must not exploit them. Both sides present rational justifications that will be explained. On the one hand, supporters of
the
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using
animals
for testing in laboratories believe that every product has to
test
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be tested
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on
animals
first,
and after positive results,
humans
must
use
products
.
That is
to say, some
products
and
medicins
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medicines
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have
consequenc
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consequences
consequence
on our body because of that we should
use
animals
for testing first. A good illustration is that medicines and
vaccnates
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vaccines
vaccinates
, like
flu
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vaccine
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vaccines
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,
had
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were
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tested on
animals
for finding
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to find
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the
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apply
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negative or positive
result
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results
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on
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apply
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them
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. It might have negative
result
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results
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, like
lose
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losing
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their ability to move.
Furthermore
,
costemic
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cosmetic
cosmic
products
, like lipsticks, in some factories,
they
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use
animals
for testing their
products
.
On the other hand
, others put forward the idea that we must not
use
animals
or any creatures for
humans'
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goals. Simply
puts
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put
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, they have
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the rights
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rights
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right
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to live like
humans
. They do not have
ability
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the ability
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to make a decision or
talking
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talk
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with
this
behaviour of
humans
. They will suffer from
pains
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pain
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and any changes and it is
againist
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against
the animal's rights. A good example is that when laboratories, especially medicals, want to test their medicine on
animals
, they have some effect on their brain and heart. It might change their blood pressure and will
be
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cause
of
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heart
attach
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attack
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, and
the
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end, until finding the correct formula,
animals
will
be died
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. By way of conclusion, considering the point discussed above, both sides of the argument present rational reasons. I am,
however
, of the opinion that
animals
have rights and we must not exploit them for our goals
due to
the fact that they cannot preserve themselves and we should be kind
with
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to
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them.
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The essay clearly addresses both viewpoints on using animals for laboratory tests, demonstrating a balanced understanding of the subject.
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Your personal opinion is clearly stated at the end of the essay, which is important to address the prompt effectively.
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There is a good attempt to provide relevant examples, such as mentioning flu vaccine testing and cosmetic products testing.

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