Some people believe that animals must be used for conducting laboratory tests, while other people think that animals are innocent creatures and we must not exploit them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
People are calling into question using
animals
for conducting laboratory tests, while
some individuals believe that we must use
animals
for testing. Others assert that animals
are innocent creatures and we must not exploit them. Both sides present rational justifications that will be explained.
On the one hand, supporters of the
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animals
for testing in laboratories believe that every product has to test
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be tested
animals
first,
and after positive results, humans
must use
products
. That is
to say, some products
and medicins
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medicines
consequenc
on our body because of that we should Correct your spelling
consequences
consequence
use
animals
for testing first. A good illustration is that medicines and vaccnates
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vaccines
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flu
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the flu
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animals
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result
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results
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them
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lose
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losing
Furthermore
, costemic
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cosmetic
cosmic
products
, like lipsticks, in some factories, they
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use
animals
for testing their products
.
On the other hand
, others put forward the idea that we must not use
animals
or any creatures for humans'
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the rights
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humans
. They do not have ability
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this
behaviour of humans
. They will suffer from pains
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the animal's rights. A good example is that when laboratories, especially medicals, want to test their medicine on Correct your spelling
against
animals
, they have some effect on their brain and heart. It might change their blood pressure and will be
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the
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animals
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.
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The essay clearly addresses both viewpoints on using animals for laboratory tests, demonstrating a balanced understanding of the subject.
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There is a good attempt to provide relevant examples, such as mentioning flu vaccine testing and cosmetic products testing.
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