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coherence cohesion
Strengthen the overall logical structure of the essay. For instance, ensure each paragraph has a clear central argument and supporting details. Use better transitions between sentences and paragraphs to improve flow.
task achievement
Address grammatical errors and improve sentence construction to make ideas clearer. Revise the essay to avoid repetitive sentences and redundancy (e.g., repeating the same points in different parts of the essay).
task achievement
Use more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mentioning specific activities or amenities that boost the economy or aid community spirit can be beneficial. The current examples are a bit generic and could be more impactful with more details.
task achievement
Your essay demonstrates an understanding of the topic, and you have wisely mentioned both sides of the argument which shows balance.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, and you have made a decent effort to summarize your stance.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite