The pie charts below show the amount of electricity generated by energy source in Scotland for twenty years ago and last year.
The two pie charts illustrate the composition of
energy
source
for Fix the agreement mistake
sources
electricity
in Scotland between twenty years
ago and last
year
. Units are measured in percentage (%). Overall
, it is clear that
the majority of the source
was Coal. Otherwise
, the smallest number at the end
of the period was hydro pumped
storage.
Add a hyphen
hydro-pumped
In
20 Change preposition
apply
years
ago, Coal was the highest composition for source
of electricity
which accounted 41.4
%. Change preposition
for 41.4
However
, there was dramatically decreased
in the Replace the word
a dramatic decrease
last
year
, only about 32.7%. Following that, the second highest energy
source
in
20 Change preposition
apply
years
ago that contributed for
Change preposition
to
electricity
was Gas, which only slightly decrease
from twenty Wrong verb form
decreased
years
ago around
0.6%. Change preposition
at around
In addition
, Hydro natural flow and Hydro pumped storage were only 8.7% and 3.1% in
the beginning of the period, respectively. There were Change the preposition
at
also
decreased insignificant during the given periods.
Looking at the figures, a few energy
source
were increased Change to a plural noun
sources
such
as Oil, Nuclear, and other renewables
Fix the agreement mistake
renewable sources
source
. Last
year
, the percentage of Oil was
almost doubled from the first given periods. Verb problem
oil
Moreover
, Nuclear became the second highest of
Change preposition
apply
energy
source
for electricity
and definitely below the
Coal. Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, other renewables
Change the noun form
renewable
energy
accounted for 5.1% in the last
year
which increased from the twenty years
ago.Submitted by rifki.lufthansa on
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