Scientists agree that many people eat too much junk food and it is damaging their health. Some people think that this problem can be solved by educating people, while others believe that education will not work. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is true that consuming

junk

food

excessively is

damaged

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to

people

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health

. To solve

this

problem, educating

people

have

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been

adressed

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addressed

as an effective solution,

whereas

others

claimed

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this

is an inappropriate approach. I am more biased to the latter view and would suggest

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solution in the following paragraphs.

To begin

with, educating citizens can raise the social conscience about the harmful

effect

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effects

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of

junk

food

and

also

encourage them to consume functional

food

. By analysing the criteria

propotion

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proportion

promotion

of nutritions needed in a healthy meal and analysing the substances inside the

junk

food

,

people

will raise awareness and restrict the amount of the

consumption

of

junk

food

.

Also

, a planned diet is vital in the educational program to guide them

eating

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in eating

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the

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healthy

food

and

improve

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their

health

. Take Jamie Oliver as an example. He has

been

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travelled around the US to teach children the negative impact of

junk

food

on

people

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lives and

also

taught them how to set out a

health

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diet.

Nevertheless

,

junk

food

is an appropriate means in the digital age as

people

are becoming

bussier

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busier

bustier

. Indeed,

these

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food

is affordable and convenient, so it is guaranteed as the dominant of the

food

market. For these reasons,

people

do not fully understand the education of

food

and

unlikely

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to accept the

true

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about how harmful the

food

they have eaten. In my

viewpoints

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, authorities should work in conjunction

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citizens for more efficient solutions. Obviously, the authorities should impose a stricter law on the tax of

junk

food

, in order to restrict the

consumption

on

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junk

food

. Meanwhile, residents have to accept the harmful side of

junk

food

as

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and

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try to keep

thhe

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the

consumption

on

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of

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those

food

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foods

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at the lowest rate. By doing so, the problem of

junk

food

can be solved logically. On balance,

due to

the increase in

junk

food

consumption

that

posibly

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possibly

escalating to detrimental

health

, many solutions have been

adressed

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addressed

.

Although

educating

people

is beneficial, it is still

impracticle

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impractical

and the

implement

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of a stricter law must be a more reasonable solution.

Therefore

, I am more inclined toward the second view of the assertion.