The charts below show the general happiness level in Korean society by age, gender, and income in 1980 and 2012.

The charts below show the general happiness level in Korean society by age, gender, and income in 1980 and 2012.
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The three charts show the general
happiness
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level of Korean citizens by age, gender, and
income
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in 1980 and 2012. One of the first things to notice is that
happiness
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levels
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showed
decline
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in all age groups except for adults between 31 and 40 years old. Remarkably, the
happiness
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levels
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of young people from 21 to 30 years old plummeted from 70% in 1980 to approximately 20% in 2012.
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,
while
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the
happiness
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levels
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of males increased from 50% in 1980 to 68% in 2010, the
levels
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of women's
happiness
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fell from over 70% in 1980 to 62% in 2012.
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the
last
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chart, the
happiness
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levels
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by
income
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showed a similar trend throughout the period. All figures dropped in 2012. The most noticeable is that the
happiness
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levels
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of
income
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above 60,000
dollar
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was the highest in both 1980 and 2012, the figure was 70% and 62%, respectively.
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, it is seen that males were happier than females in 2012
while
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people in their 20s showed the lowest rate of
happiness
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.
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, it is interesting that the
happiness
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level was higher
as
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for
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people who get more
income
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words happiness, income, levels with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
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