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The bar chart shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The population of American
families
 with different levels of
income
 in 2007, 2011 and 2015 is illustrated in the bar chart. Within an
overall
 view,
it is clear that
 throughout the three
years
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 the population of households with an annual earning of 75,000 to 99,999 dollars is ranked
the
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fifth
and
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and
families
 with
100,000
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a 100,000
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 dollar
income
 have been the first with 2011 being an exception. In 2007 25
million
famillies
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families
have
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had
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 the
lleast
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least
 amount of
income
 which
then
experiences
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experienced
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 a subtle growth to 30
million
 in the two
upcomming
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upcoming
 years. The rate of households with
most
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 amount of
income
however
 started at 30
million
 people and
experienceda
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experienced a
experienced
 slight
decrese
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decrease
 to roughly 25
million
 in 2011 and
the
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peaked in 2015 by 35
million
families
. the number
families
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of families
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 with
other
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the other
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 three yearly
income
 groups who earn from 25000 to 99.999 show
an
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a
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 somewhat steady pattern in the course of three years with
families
 who
recieve
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receive
 under 50000 dollars being consistently below 30
million
, followed by 20
million
famillies
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families
 with less
that
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than
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 74000 and 15
million
 with less than 99.999 annual
income
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families, income, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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