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The three pie charts illustrate the changes in annual spending by local government in Someland in three different year

The three pie charts illustrate the changes in annual spending by local government in Someland in three different year
Three pie charts
given
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give
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an
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apply
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information
of
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about
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an
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apply
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annual spending
changed
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changes
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 by
local
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the local
a local
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authority
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authorities
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 in
Someland
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Homeland
 from the year
of
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apply
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1908 to 2000.
Overall
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, the changes in annual spending by
local
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the local
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goverment
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government
governments
 in the largest
propotion
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proportion
is
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are
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 higher Education in three different
years
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.
Hhowever
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However
, to
compared
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compare
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 in each ten
years
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 the smallest changes
is
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are
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 in the section of environmental service.
To begin
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 with,
it is clear that
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 the largest
propotion
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proportion
 of
annula
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annual
 changes, the local
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goverment
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government
 is
cotribute
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contribute
contributed
 an Education Higher since 1980 which
is
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apply
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started at 35%
,
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apply
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 and increased to 45% in
teh
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the
years
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 later.
Nevertheless
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, 5% was
decrease
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decreased
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 in 2000.
In addition
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,
in
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apply
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each
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every
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 ten
years
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 still
encourage
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encouraged
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in
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apply
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K-2
educational
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 in average spending. Moving ahead, Health and human resources were supported by
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 in 18 -25% of annual spending,
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,
last
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 period of time local
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goverment
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government
 spending on other just only 1%
os
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of
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 their spend. Despite in 1980 and 1990.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goverment, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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