IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The bar charts give data on noise levels by day and by night in rural and urban areas in Europe

The bar charts give data on noise levels by day and by night in rural and urban areas in Europe
#bar #data #noise #levels #night #areas #europe
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The provided bar charts illustrate information about the amount of four
varius
Correct your spelling
various
noises
Use synonyms
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
every
day
Use synonyms
 and every
night
Use synonyms
 in villages and cities in Europe in 2007. A glance at the graph reveals that
traffic
Use synonyms
 was the highest amount of annoying
noises
Use synonyms
 for
people
Use synonyms
 in the rural and urban areas in Europe.
However
Linking Words
,
industry
Add an article
the industry
show examples
 did not make some
Use synonyms
noises
Fix the agreement mistake
noise
show examples
 for both of the regions in the EU in 2017. In 2017,the number of
people
Use synonyms
 who were disturbed by
traffic
Use synonyms
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
night
Use synonyms
 in cities was twice as noisy as in suburbs in Europe.
Moreover
Linking Words
,just under
two thirds
Add a hyphen
two-thirds
show examples
 of
people
Use synonyms
 were annoyed by
traffic
Use synonyms
 roughly 64
Use synonyms
millions
Change to singular
million
show examples
 in
Use synonyms
day
Add an article
the day
a day
show examples
(which was the highest amount of bothering
Use synonyms
noises
Fix the agreement mistake
noise
show examples
 over the year),Compared to just over a third of them who were affected by
traffic
Use synonyms
 nearly 34
Use synonyms
millions
Change to singular
million
show examples
 in
Use synonyms
day
Add an article
the day
a day
show examples
 in 2017.
In contrast
Linking Words
,Aircraft and Industry were nowhere near as thunderous as
traffic
Use synonyms
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
day
Use synonyms
 and
night
Use synonyms
 in European countries in 2017.
in addition
Linking Words
,the number of
people
Use synonyms
 who were not satisfied
due to
Linking Words
 noise by train
for
Change preposition
apply
show examples
day
Use synonyms
 and
night
Use synonyms
 in cities was 10 and 8
Use synonyms
millions
Change to singular
million
show examples
,respectively.
similary
Correct your spelling
similarly
similar
,in rural areas It was
8millions
Correct your spelling
8 million
 in
Use synonyms
day
Add an article
the day
a day
show examples
 and 6
Use synonyms
millions
Change to singular
million
show examples
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
Use synonyms
night
Add an article
the night
show examples
 in 2017.
Submitted by TUTOO on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words noises, day, night, traffic, people, millions with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: