Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
One point of view supports that a huge problem of our environment is the loss of some species of
animals
and plants
, while
others say that some problems in our nature
can be more important. This
essay will argue that although
the loss of species is a big problem for the future of nature
, I strongly believe that there are the biggest environmental issues, which are dangerous for people’s lives
, such
as air
pollution or lack of water
and energy.
On the one hand, we can notice that a lot of types of animals
and plants
are being destroyed nowadays, which impacts our nature
. Moreover
, some kinds of them can not be re-generated at all. Also
, every species of animal or plant has its own role in the environment and therefore
, they have to be protected. For example
, in Kazakhstan, there is a special “Red Book”, which has a list of protected plants
and animals
by the government.
On the other hand
, there are the most important issues in the environment, like air
pollution or water
and energy shortage and we can not imagine our lives
without them. That is
to say, they have a big impact on our daily lives
and we depend on basic things such
as fresh air
, clean water
and electricity. Thereby, we have many risks to our health due to
polluted air
and water
. For instance
, in Almaty, a high level of danger for citizens’ lives
exists because of the worst air
quality. Furthermore
, it is on the list of cities with the worst ecology in the world.
In conclusion, it is argued that the loss of many kinds of animals
or plants
is the biggest problem of our nature
, however
, others feel that other issues can be more important to us. I strongly agree that there are many problems in our nature
, which are dangerous for people’s lives
.Submitted by kalelkkhana on
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task achievement
Your essay addresses both views and presents a clear opinion. However, make sure to support your arguments with more detailed explanations and examples to strengthen your response.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of your essay is good. However, some sentences could benefit from smoother transitions to enhance the flow of ideas.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames the argument well.
task achievement
Your essay presents comprehensive ideas and relevant specific examples to support your arguments.