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It has become easier for people to give review on products Do you think it is positive or negative development

#people #review #products #development
In
this
 contemporary era, feedback on
products
 is becoming easier for inhabitants. I strongly contemplate that
this
 is a
postive
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positive
 development. Adequate
evidences
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evidence
pieces of evidence
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are
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is
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 obtainable in order to substantiate the concept of
product
 reviews. The
top notch
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 concrete reason is
internet
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the internet
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. To explicate it, inhabitants post
the
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reviews on any
products
 or services through
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the internet
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internet
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 which helps other consumers to know which
product
 best suits
to
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them. To quote an instance of Nike's website share relevant customer views on their
products
 so that
this
 will assist newcomers to choose the best one. Another rationale to be considered which can not be neglected is mouth talk. To elaborate
it
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,
this
 method is unquestionable as not only,
it
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 spread the positive points of
products
infront
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in front
 of
huge
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the huge
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 amount of people but
also
,
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but it
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it
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apply
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helps
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also helps
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 in advertising the
product
 economically. To epitome, one of my
friend
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friends
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 recently bought his clothes from Hollister store and after using that
product
, he
share
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shares
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 the feedback of the
product
 in terms of quality assurance and
comfertability
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comfortability
 which effect
postively
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positively
 on my friend circle and we are eager to do shopping from Hollister.
As a result
of
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,
this
 mouth talk directly
accelerate
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accelerates
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product's
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the product's
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 advertising. To recapitulate, I reiterate that
product's
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product
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 reviews
is
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are
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 unexacting as it has myriad positive consequences namely
choose
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choosing
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 the
product
 wisely
along
with
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apply
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advertising the
product
 efficiently.
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coherence cohesion
To achieve higher band scores, further improvement in coherence and cohesion is required. Ensure a smoother flow of ideas and use more varied linking words and phrases.
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Enhancing language accuracy will improve scoring. Take care to avoid minor errors in grammar and word choice, such as 'inhabitants' (better replaced with 'people' or 'consumers'), and 'comfertability' (correct as 'comfort').
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For even higher marks, further develop your ideas and expand on them to provide more comprehensive arguments. Explore counterarguments and address them as well.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion which frame the response nicely.
task achievement
Relevant examples are provided to support main points, particularly those concerning Nike and Hollister.

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