The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2006 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2006 and the present day.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps illustrate changes in the
university
campus area in the year 2006 and the present.
Overall
, the number of
student
accommodations has increased,
also
the expansion of the Art and Science Faculty buildings.
In contrast
, the park that surrounded the
lake
in the middle of the campus has disappeared,
along with
the restaurants, shops, and
university
office buildings.
Firstly
, the
student
dormitories used to be located separately on the southwest side and across the street from the
lake
,
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then
has
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developed into two buildings across the street and replaced the restaurant and shops as a single building on the southeast. There are
also
changes on the teaching block,
Art
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The Art
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and Science faculty used to
located
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in the same single block which turned into two separate complexes with the science faculty
replaced
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the
university
office with the new construction.
In addition
, the new
student
facility complex was built on the southwest area of the
lake
that used to be the
student
accommodation. The new complex consists of the
university
offices,
restaurant
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restaurants
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and shops in the same building.
Furthermore
, the seating area around the
lake
was
also
removed.
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