The diagram below illustrates the carbon cycle in nature.

The diagram below illustrates the carbon cycle in nature.
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The picture shows how carbon dioxide is created in nature.
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, there are two core stages which start with CO2 transmission into the atmosphere and end with the CO2 consumption
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underground.
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, the carbon dioxide produced from animal and plant respiration spreads into the air and forms clouds.
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, some CO2 sources are from the emissions of factories.
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this
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stage is complete,
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the photosynthesis
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is progressing, many CO2 molecules are consumed by plants.
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, CO2 is supplied to
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organisms. Following that,
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animal corpses and green waste can be transformed into fossils and fossil energy
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CO2 and brine effects, the other participates in the lifespan of nitrogen bacteria to make nutrients for soil and plants. Simultaneously, some of the nutrients, which are made from the decomposition, are absorbed by the roots of trees in a
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called root respiration. Ultimately, The
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ends with the spreading of carbon dioxide by respiration activity and repeats the operation again.
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