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The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009.

The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009.
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The given table
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 several aspects of data about salaries of high school educators from five different countries in 2009, indicated by an
unidentifed
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 currency, presumably US
dollars
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Overall
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, it can be clearly observed that
Australian
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Australians
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 yielded the
fewest
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lowest
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wage
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wages
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,
whereas
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that
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of
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those from Luxembourg received the highest.
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, it is interesting to note that Aussies reached
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 maximum salary the fastest
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 with the other nations.
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 with, in terms of starting rates, in Luxembourg
at
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80,000 US
dollars
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 was the greatest monthly yield that
highschool
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high school
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teacher
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teachers
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 gain among the other four regions, followed by Denmark at 45,000 US
dollars
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While
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that
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of
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other two East Asia countries: Japan and Korea salary's
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 at around 30-35,000 US
dollars
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,
Australian
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Australia
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 begins with
fewer
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 than the minimum figure of
that
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 aforementioned nations of 2,000 US
dollars
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. In regards
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job's
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job
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 progress, Australian and Denn educators reached
its
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 maximum revenues within less than 10 years, whilst
that
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of
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the others require more than three decades to skyrocket to
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 highest salary.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondary/high school teachers
  • annual salary
  • gross income
  • net salary
  • cost of living
  • education funding
  • gender pay gap
  • teaching hours
  • years of experience
  • additional qualifications
  • economic indicators
  • average wage
  • currency conversion
  • educational disparities
  • international comparison
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