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Writing Samples
Band 7.5

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • give details of your study plans • explain why you want to get a part-time job • suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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Hi Sara, How have you been? I have come to the UK to study chemistry at White College since September. I need your help to find a part-time job
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 I am studying. My major includes practical and technical subjects. Our practical courses need special facilities for laboratories which are provided on Tuesday, Wednesday and Thursday from 13-17.
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, our technical courses
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 on a daily basis except at weekends. To rectify
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 situation, I need a part-time job to get to know about the culture and the way of life in
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 country.
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, I think it help me to become familiar with new people and improve my communication here. From an economic perspective, I find
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 as an opportunity to gain money in order to solve
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, I’d suggest connecting me if you know any people who are searching for an amateur part-time workforce in their business. It is important for me to balance
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 job with my academic studies. Thanks a million in advance. I ‘ll think of a way to repay your kindness in future. Best wishes, Ma

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grammar
Try to proofread your letter for grammar and spelling accuracy. For instance, 'I 'll' should be 'I'll' and 'help me to become' would be better as 'help me become.'
task
Consider providing a bit more detail about your study plans, such as any specific courses or projects you might be involved in.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing of the letter are both very friendly and appropriate for a letter to a friend.
task achievement
You clearly explain why you want a part-time job and how it would benefit you both culturally and economically.
logical structure
The letter is well-structured, with separate paragraphs for each point you need to discuss.
suitable writing tone
Your writing tone is suitable for a friendly letter, making it easy and pleasant to read.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational aspirations
  • Work experience
  • Financial independence
  • Resume (or CV)
  • Local job market
  • International student
  • Legal requirements
  • Student work permit
  • Employment trends
  • Time management
  • Networking
  • A part-time position
  • Balance studies and work
  • Job hunting strategies
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