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The charts below show the number of working hours per week, in industrial sector, in four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.

The charts below show the number of working hours per week, in industrial sector, in four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.
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The charts illustrate the percentage of manpower and their working
hours
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 per
week
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 in the industrial sector of two different European countries in the year 2002.
According to
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 France industrial
work
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 statistics-2002, 50 per cent of people
work
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 between 31-35
hours
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 per
week
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 and 35
percent
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per cent
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 of men and women spend their time in the office is about 36-40
Hours
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 per seven days. On the other side, there are
few
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a few
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 10%
professionals
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of professionals
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limited
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limit
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 their working
hours
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an
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to an
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 average of 20
hours
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 out 168
hours
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 of time. Shockingly, there are very rare workers who
allocated
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businness
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business
hours
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 up to 50 +
hours
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 per
week
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.
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 in Denmark, the industrial data shows almost 70% of manpower works 6
hours
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 per day and 36-40
hours
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 per
week
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. 0-10% of people
work
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 for 30
hours
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 and 50+
hours
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 as well on a weekly basis.
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, France people are dedicated to their
work
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 when compared to Denmark citizens to develop
the
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apply
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industrialisation.
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