The charts below show the number of working hours per week, in industrial sector, in four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.

The charts below show the number of working hours per week, in industrial sector, in

four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and

reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.
The available bar charts illustrate the rate of weekly Service
hours
of industrial employees of France and Denmark in 2002.
Overall
,
it is clear that
in both
countries‘
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countries
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majority
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the majority
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of employees spend 31 to 40
hours
of their week at work .
However
, they show
diferent
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different
proportions in
eachof
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each of
them . The French show a slight fluctuation in the first three groups of working shifts going slightly above and below 10%.
Then
, there is a sharp increase in the numbers indicating half of
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the Industerial
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Industerial
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Industrial
staff
having
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have
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working
hours
ranging from 31 to 36. As the length of time grows, the figures for individuals
decreases
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decrease
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reaching 10% at 41-45 followed by an unexpected growth in 46-50 by 20%. Denmark ,
however
, depicts a somewhat steady proportion of 10% of staff in different ranges of
the
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apply
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business
hours
with two major exceptions being the fact that Just above
one fifth
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one-fifth
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of Danish employees work 31-35
hours
and more than half of them 36-40.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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