You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

Rapid expansion of
internet
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has made
newspaper
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newspapers
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thing
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of
past
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the past
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as mobiles and computers
has
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replaced hard copies. I totally agree with
this
notion because
news
and current affairs are readily available to the citizens. For decades,
newspapers
were the major source of of giving updates about sports and current affairs to the populace,
however
, with
rise
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the rise
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of mobile phones and
internet
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the internet
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,
downfall
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the downfall
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of
this
mode of
news
was seen. Earlier, people
have
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to wait for
newspapers
till early morning
whereas
now updated and recent
news
are just one click away from them, making
easy
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it easy
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and
convient
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convenient
for readers.
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, I
use
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used
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to read
newspaper
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newspapers
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in my childhood but now my favourite newspaper
got
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its own
news
website and is available 24 hours. Social media has contributed a lot
in
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decline
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the decline
a decline
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of
newspapers
by
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in
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certain ways. In
this
era,
its
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it's
it is
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easy to find
out
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apply
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the
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apply
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trending global
news
,
moreover
, these social media platforms are accessible free of cost.
For instance
, X (Formerly known as Twitter) which is free and is without any subscription
got
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updated
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an updated
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trending chart in its feed, which
assist
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assists
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the reader
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reader
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readers
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to match
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in matching
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the pace of trending
news
either
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whether
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it is political or sports. In conclusion, I would reiterate that
rise
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the rise
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of social media and
internet
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the internet
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has made
newspapers
thing
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think
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of
past
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the past
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because these
plateforms
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platforms
keep readers and users up to date
whereas
for
newspapers
people have to wait 24 hours.
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coherence cohesion
Your introduction presents the main idea clearly, but it can be improved by briefly outlining the points you will discuss. This will make the essay more coherent from the start.
coherence cohesion
Ensure you proofread your work for minor grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('the' before 'internet') and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'mobiles and computers has' should be 'mobiles and computers have').
task achievement
The body paragraphs are well-structured and present clear ideas. However, try to expand on your examples with a bit more detail to strengthen your argument—for instance, providing more context on how immediate news availability influences daily life.
coherence cohesion
Conclude your essay by summarizing the main points discussed in the body paragraphs to reinforce your argument. This helps in improving the cohesion and leaves a lasting impression.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear stance and argument from the beginning, making it easy for the reader to understand your position.
task achievement
You have included relevant examples from your own experience, which makes the argument more relatable and substantiated.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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