In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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As the question mentions, people are increasingly more aware of the history of architecture in their own countries. There are mainly two reasons for
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in my opinion.
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, simply for fun. And
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, it is useful to gain a new idea for pursuing more comfortable lives.
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, in
Japan
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, the traditional wooden house
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can let the wind come in and out for a whole year and
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can be shaken without folding down when the earthquake hits because the wooden structure has a little space each other, suitable
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most Japanese seasons and small earthquakes are frequent. In summer, the wind from outside would cool down inside the house, and in winter, our ancestors would get
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heat from a
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so changing the air in the house was necessary. Like
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, just knowing the reasons for the structure provokes some kind of joy and pride in our
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.
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knowing the history of
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such
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as shrines in
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is very important for many people in the view of evacuation. For hundreds and thousands of years, Japanese shrines have been built on
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hill
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or mountainous
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with their gates called “Torii” usually standing at the point
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the tsunami caused
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huge casualty had reached in the past. In lots of rural areas within
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, people are still told by their grandparents, “When the earthquake comes, you should go up the mountain as soon as possible and keep in
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until you get into the Shrine.” Those stories are very common in
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and I think countries with a long history should keep those ascended words and important buildings.
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, the ways to seek information on the traditional
architectures
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architecture
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should be both visiting the exhibitions or museums and
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directly
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the elderlies
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elderlies
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around you. Those are the fastest ways to know the truth and to foster and renew community relations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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