The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007.
The graph above illustrates the preferences of overseas
visitors
over three
areas-
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Coast
, Mountains and Lakes in a country in
Euroupe
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Europe
. In 1987, the
coast
was the most popular destination for overseas travellers with a count of 40000
visitors
visited
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the
area
. After a slight decrease to 35000 in 1992, there was a significant rise
of
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in
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visitors
travelling to the
coast
with nearly 75000
visitors
recorded in 2007. The lakes were
intially
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initially
the least popular travel destination among the others with only 10000
visited
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visiting
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the
area
.
However
, there was a stark rise
of
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visitors
in the 1990s, overtaking the
coast
and the mountains respectively and
reaches
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reaching
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its peak in 2002 with 75000 overseas tourists
visited
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visiting
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. The
amount
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number
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of
visitors
to the mountains
then
dropped to 50000 in 2007, falling under the
coast
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coastal
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area
and
became
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the second most popular travel
destiation
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destination
destinations
among overseas
travelers
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travellers
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. 20000 overseas
visitors
travelled to the mountain
area
in 1987 as the second
popular
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most popular
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destination on the list at that time, followed by a mild increase over the years to 35000 in 2007, despite it
became
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becoming
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the least popular location among the three.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, coast, area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • number of
  • areas
  • European country
  • between
  • 1987 and 2000
  • graph
  • introduce
  • overview
  • trends
  • describe
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • summarize
  • main findings
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