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The charts below show the number of working hours per week, in industrial sector, in four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.

The charts below show the number of working hours per week, in industrial sector, in four European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.
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The line charts below illustrate the amount of time per week, in the industrial sector, in France and Denmark in 2002.
Overall
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, it is obvious that the highest working
hours
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 in France are 31-35
hours
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,
while
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, in Denmark, it is 36-40
hours
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.
Firstly
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, France is the place with the lowest working amount of residents. The sum of residents who
work
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 1-14
hours
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 is 10%
while
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, the percentage of citizens who
work
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 for 15-20 or 21-30 are above 10%. The rate of
people
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 who
work
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 31-35
hours
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 is the highest proportion in the graph at 50%. The number of
people
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 who
work
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 50+
hours
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 is the same amount as the
people
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 who
work
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 1-14
hours
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.
In contrast
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, in Denmark the
people
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 who
work
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 1-14, 15-20, 21-30, 41-45, 46-50 and 50+
hours
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 is almost the same by 10%,
however
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, only the quantity of crowd who
work
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 31-35 is above 20% and the interest of individuals who
work
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 36-40
hours
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 is the highest point in the picture by 70% which is a higher fraction than the highest point in
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, work, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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