The graph below shows the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

The statistics regarding the types and amount of consumed fast food

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amongst

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Australian teenagers between the years 1975 and 200 are illustrated in the presented line graph.

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, the graph starts with a large disparity among the rate of consumption of

fish

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and

chips

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and other kinds of fast food, which reverses over time. Looking into detail, a roughly parallel trend is visible between the annual usage of pizza and hamburgers starting from well under 20

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in 1975 and gradually growing to above 80% by the end of the chart, with hamburgers holding a higher rank. The ever-increasing pattern of the mentioned foods,

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, is in marked contrast to the figures for

fish

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and

chips

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which began

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100%, experienced some fluctuations and fell to just under 40% in 2000. At

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the two

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stages of the graph, the consumption rate of

fish

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and

chips

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meets the two other

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groups

of fast food.

First

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being, the equal usage of hamburgers and

fish

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and

chips

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in 1985, and the

second,

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with pizza in 1995.

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