The graph below shows the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

The graph below shows the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
The statistics regarding the types and amount of consumed fast food
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amongst
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among
Australian teenagers between the years 1975 and 200 are illustrated in the presented line graph.
Overall
, the graph starts with a large disparity among the rate of consumption of
fish
and
chips
and other kinds of fast food, which reverses over time. Looking into detail, a roughly parallel trend is visible between the annual usage of pizza and hamburgers starting from well under 20
percent
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in 1975 and gradually growing to above 80% by the end of the chart, with hamburgers holding a higher rank. The ever-increasing pattern of the mentioned foods,
however
, is in marked contrast to the figures for
fish
and
chips
which began
with
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100%, experienced some fluctuations and fell to just under 40% in 2000. At
two
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the two
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stages of the graph, the consumption rate of
fish
and
chips
meets the two other
grpups
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groups
of fast food.
First
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The first
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being, the equal usage of hamburgers and
fish
and
chips
in 1985, and the
second,
with pizza in 1995.
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