Some people think that teenagers who commit crimes should be treated the same way as adult criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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topic should be examined before forming an opinion. Both points of view will be discussed in the following essay.
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should be taken the same way as adult Use synonyms
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for several reasons . Use synonyms
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, a study published at New York University concluded that 40% of countries issued Linking Words
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for the better than before .will decrease the bad friends that have and improve a life of young Use synonyms
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. If they did not make these decisions life would be worse and be easier for young Use synonyms
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crimes
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poverty levels are rising in many cities and some young Verb problem
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need to provide for their families to pay for daily needs Use synonyms
such
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instead
of being treated under the same laws as adults Linking Words
criminals
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crimes
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are a controversial topic with different opinions . Both sides have their merits on balance. Personally, I believe that the advantages of Use synonyms
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