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You recently went to visit a friend in their new home. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • tell your friend what you liked about his/her new house • say what you did or enjoyed most about your stay with your friend • suggest when and where you could meet your friend next

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Dear SARA, How have you been? I was very interested in visiting your new
home
 on 21st September. It was a wonderful experience for me. it was a blast! All parts of your new
home
 were marvellous and I fell in love
to
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 that mansion. What was more interesting,
the
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 balcony on the top of the floor which overviewed an iconic scenery
while
 experiencing a nice breeze. Staying with you in your
home
 was an enjoyable occasion. My memory rekindles the dairies of the day on a regular basis. I remember when we cooked a pizza together, playing pop and classic tracks of music and watching horror movies. All these activities added joy and zest to me.
Finally
, owing to that pleasant meeting, I suggest that you arrive
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home
 on upcoming Friday at 5 p.m. I hope you can make it to come. I am looking forward to receiving a message from you. Best wishes, Ma
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grammar
There are a few grammatical inaccuracies and awkward phrases (e.g., 'I fell in love to that mansion'). Paying attention to grammatical details can improve the overall writing quality.
coherence
To add more coherence, consider using more linking words and phrases to make the transitions between ideas smoother.
task response
The letter responds thoroughly to all parts of the task, describing what was liked about the new house, what was most enjoyed during the visit, and suggesting a next meeting time.
tone
The tone of the letter is suitable for a friendly correspondence, which makes it engaging and appropriate.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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