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IELTS Essay Task 1: Transport Preferences Among Young People The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. IELTS Essay Task 1: Transport Preferences Among Young People The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

IELTS Essay Task 1: Transport Preferences Among Young People The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. IELTS Essay Task 1: Transport Preferences Among Young People The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the
favorite
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favourite
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vehichles
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vehicles
 that
liked
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are liked
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 by young individuals in the four countries in one year period.
Unites
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Units
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 are measured by percentages.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that
car
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cars
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 become the most chosen by young humans throughout the given period in three countries.
Moreover
, the
used
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 of
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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 become the lowest in some nations. In terms of the most transport chosen by young people in
UK
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the UK
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 and
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the United
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United
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the United
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States
,
Car is
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cars
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accounted
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account
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 for 60 in both of those countries. In the
UK
,
Bicycle
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Bicycles
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become
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 the second preference and made up 10,
while
 in the United
States
 stood at 10.
In contrast
,
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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become
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became
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 the third choice in
UK
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the UK
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,
while
become
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became
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 the second in
United
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the United
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States
 which accounted for 20 and 30, respectively. Regarding the moving
liking
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 by young individuals in France and Italy, Motorcycle
become
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 the least liked which constituted
at
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above 10 and almost 10, respectively. The second vehicle
that
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apply
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chosen by young humans in France is
Car
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the Car
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,
while
 in
the
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apply
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Italy is
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the Bicyle
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Bicyle
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bicycle
 which stood at 40 and approximately 13, respectively. In Italy,
Car
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the Car
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become
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becomes
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 the first preference like in The
UK
 and
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the United
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United
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the United
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States
 and stood at around 75,
while
 in France
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bicycle
bycicle
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bicycle
become
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became
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 the most liked and accounted for around 45.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, uk, states with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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