The graph below shows a number of tourists visiting a particular carribean island between 2010 and 2017

The graph below shows a number of tourists visiting a particular carribean island between 2010 and 2017
The figure illustrates the statistics from the year 2010 to 2017 the
number
of
tourists
who visited Caribbean
Island
by residing on cruise ships and on the
island
. The unit for
visitors
travelled is in millions. Among the
visitors
who stayed on the cruise ships, 0.25
million
lived in 2010 and 2012 and half a
million
in 2011 and 2013. By 2014, the
people
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number of people
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residing rose to half a
million
taking the value to 1
million
. From 2014 to 2017, there was an exponential increase in the
number
of
visitors
with every year 0.25
million
people adding taking to 2
million
by the end of 2017. Among the
visitors
who lived on the
Island
, from 2010 to 2011 for 1 year the
visitors
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visitor's
visitors'
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population remained
same
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the same
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0.75
million
. But, from 2011 to 2013 it rose by a
million
. And later on, from 2013 to 2015 the
number
of
tourists
remained
same
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the same
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of
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at
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about 1.5
million
. There was
decline
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a decline
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by 2016 of 0.5
million
but, it increased again to 1.5
million
by 2017.
Therefore
,
to conclude
in total there was a steady rise in the
number
of
tourists
for 5 years and later by 2017 there was a surge of 3.5
million
tourists
visiting the
island
.
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