In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Most
of the states in the world, village people are shifting to town. Change preposition
In most
As a result
, Linking Words
citizen
in Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
local
area Add an article
the local
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
reducing
. I think it has more negative impacts because it hampers our environment.
Wrong verb form
reduced
Firstly
, a lot of individuals Linking Words
move
into cities in Wrong verb form
have moved
a
recent period. So, population density is increasing day by day. Correct article usage
the
Additionally
, they produce huge waste materials, which affects Linking Words
in
our surroundings. Change preposition
apply
Moreover
, in towns, humans suffer their housing shortages and they spend their nights Linking Words
in
the roadsides. Change preposition
on
For example
, in Linking Words
Bangladesh
30% Add a comma
Bangladesh,
people
lead unhealthy lives in the city areas. Change preposition
of people
As a result
, they Linking Words
suffers
some unknown diseases, which stop their household activities.
Change the verb form
suffer
On the other hand
, Linking Words
due to
Linking Words
Correct article usage
the raising
raising
Correct your spelling
rising
residents
in urban sites, Correct quantifier usage
number of residents
number
of industries and Change the article
the number
transports
is increasing. So, it helps to numerous pollutions Fix the agreement mistake
transport
such
as air, water and soil. Linking Words
Moreover
, Linking Words
Linking Words
this
pollutions disrupt our normal ecosystems and environmental balances will Change the determiner
these
unstable
. Add a missing verb
be unstable
For instance
, Dhaka is the most polluted city in Linking Words
the
Asia and it is unsuitable for human living. If individuals focus Correct article usage
apply
for
staying in the Metropolitan areas, food shortages and expenses will accelerate. Change preposition
on
Besides
, children do not get proper facilities for their physical exercises. Open places are Linking Words
filling
with buildings and all types of shortages will occur Wrong verb form
filled
due to
Linking Words
huge
population.
In conclusion, humans focus Correct article usage
the huge
towns
for their easy lives but they Change preposition
on towns
faces
more difficulties than benefits. Change the verb form
face
Although
the government takes necessary steps Linking Words
for solving
it, we should support the authorities for implementation.Change preposition
to solve
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