The graph shows population variation in three wildlife species from 2011 to 2016 in North America and its coastal areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows population variation in three wildlife species from 2011 to 2016 in North America and its coastal areas. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.
the graph provides information concerning the wildlife population in North America and its coastal areas in 6 years from 2011 to 2016, including the
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,
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dolphin
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dolphins
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and
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whale
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. generally speaking, the population of
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bear
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increased rapidly during the period,
while
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whale
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remained
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stable
and
on the other hand
the
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dolphin
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extinction. in detail, in 2011 there
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no
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found in North America, but suddenly in
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there were approximately 50
thousand
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in that area.
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consistently
raised up to 180
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thousand
bears in the next five years until the end of the period. unlike the population of
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bear
that
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found
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150
thousand
in 2011, it keeps
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significantly every year and
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finished
in 2016.
however
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whale
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2011 to 2016 shows
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a fluctuating
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yet steady trend,
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the beginning of the year we
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found about 75
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whales in the area, but
then
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to 50
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in
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2012. in the next year, it
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to 100
thousand
but
then
fell down to 75
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and not
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any significant change until 2016.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bear, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population variation
  • wildlife species
  • coastal areas
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • stable
  • year-by-year analysis
  • significant changes
  • species-wise comparison
  • influence
  • climate change
  • human activities
  • conservation efforts
  • natural predation
  • inland areas
  • population trends
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