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the chart below shows the aid form six developed countries to devloping countries from 2008-2009

the chart below shows the aid form six developed countries to devloping countries from 2008-2009
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The given bar chart illustrates the help from improved countries which are namely the US, Germany, the UK,Japan,
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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 and
Sweden
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 to improving countries between 2008 and 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the vast majority of
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billion
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the billion
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 was supplied by the US
while
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 Germany, the UK and Japan had similar trends around 10
billion
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 with up and down.
Whereas
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,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and
Sweden
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 stayed under these levels. In 2008, the US
made
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apply
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donate
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donated
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 approximately 22
billion
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 dollars and
then
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 it had a slight decrease to 20 in 2009. Next year, there was a considerable rise to roughly 25
billion
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. Germany started with 10
billion
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 dollars and it had a
steadily
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steady
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 increase year by year.
At the end
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 of the period, it reached
to
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apply
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around 15
billion
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. The UK and Japan had
a
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the
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 same wave which began with 12
billion
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then
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 they declined moderately. Afterwards, they increased steadily to more than 11
billion
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.
According to
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 the graph,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and
Sweden
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 had a parallel trend over the three-year period.
Although
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 their amount of donation was similar, the Netherlands provided more money than
Sweden
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 in the
last
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 2 years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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