In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be abel to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In
near
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future,
multitude
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a multitude
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of
people
would rather
to
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apply
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download
the
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apply
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online
e-
books
without any payment than
to
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apply
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purchase printed newspapers or
books
.
While
major of
people
prefer
e-
books
, I really enjoy reading printed
books
and prefer to buy
paper
books
in
near
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future.                              If we look at more details, we can see some advantages
using
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of using
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e-
books
.
People
will have to read more
books
because of their
study
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studies
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or any other reasons,
keeping
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so keeping
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e-
books
on their cellphones,
i-pads
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iPads
or laptops might make comfortabilities for
people
. It is because, when they need to go on a long journey or a long trip, they encounter some difficulties
of
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carrying the
major
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of
books
. They might
also
bother other
people
in their around . Another positive thing is that
the
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people
can download any online
books
they want on different kinds of online
book
sites without any payment or any request.
for example
,
the
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apply
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people
need to buy a
book
that is
really costly,
however
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however,
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they might have another way to possess that
book
.
This
way is downloading another online version of that
book
on e-
book
sites. Sometimes all of
books
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the books
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on the sites might not
without
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be without
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payment,
however
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however,
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they are much cheaper than
paper
books
.                                                                                                                                                                                                                             If
e-
books
achieve popularity
over
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all over
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the world, we will notice that we need
paper
books
and keep them in libraries as printed. One negative side is that keeping and dispersing online
version
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versions
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books
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of books
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is against to copyright of
books
.
In addition
,  it is one of
illegal
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the illegal
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ways of spreading online
books
, if those
books
have
copyright
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a copyright
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. Another disadvantage is that if we exchange all of
books
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the books
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to
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for
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e-
books
, young descendants will get attached to technology, and the parents have difficulties
of
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with
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children's
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their children's
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studying. Children will
also
face some
disease
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diseases
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of
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in
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  their vision and they will have to wear glasses
for improving
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to improve
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their vision.                                                                 In
bottom
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line,  I disagree
to exchange
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with exchanging
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printed newspapers and
books
to
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for
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online or
e-
books
. I prefer
purchase
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to purchase
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paper
books
and I really enjoy reading them as
a
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apply
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  printed.
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