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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be abel to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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download
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purchase printed newspapers or
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 they might have another way to possess that
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, young descendants will get attached to technology, and the parents have difficulties
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  their vision and they will have to wear glasses
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 and I really enjoy reading them as
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  printed.

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structural
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion for better structure. For example, an introductory paragraph that clearly states your position would set a strong premise for the essay. Additionally, ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to maintain coherence.
language
Work on minimizing grammatical errors and improving the language for clarity. Phrases like 'multitude of people would rather to' and 'major of people prefer' could be refined for better readability and accuracy. Proofreading your work can help in identifying and correcting such errors.
content
Include more specific examples and reasons to support your points. Although you've touched on issues like convenience and legality, adding examples and data (real or hypothetical) could strengthen your argument.
content
You've identified some key arguments for both sides of the debate (convenience of e-books and issues like copyright violation). This shows a balanced perspective.
content
Your personal preference for printed books adds a personal touch to the essay, making your stance clear to the reader and adding authenticity to your argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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