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Spoken communication is more powerful than written communication. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Human beings interact in different ways. It is argued that face-to-face interaction is more useful than written interaction. I strongly agree that communication in person is better than to communicate by writing a
letter
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 or an
email
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. Talking to
people
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 personally is more beneficial than sending a text message or an
email
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. When
people
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 communicate with each other in person they use body language and tone of voice, which help them to interact easily without boundaries.
As a result
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,
People
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 can see if others are being honest with them through their eyes and body postures.
Besides
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, talking to
people
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 can strengthen social bonds, human beings are likely to feel the energy from others
while
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 talking in person.
For example
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,
people
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 who speak on the TED platform have more emotional support from the audience than other speakers on YouTube, they can feel whether
people
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 believe them or not instantly
while
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 they speak.
Furthermore
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, Talking to
people
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 face-to-face helps avoid any misunderstanding that could occur if sending an
email
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 or
letter
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 to friends or colleagues.
Although
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 sending a
letter
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 or an
email
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 can explain your ideas faster, sometimes using the wrong phrases might send the incorrect message to your counterpart.
In contrast
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, spoken communication helps send the right tone and provide all necessary details
while
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 talking.
For instance
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, my friend sent a
letter
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 to his ex-wife to arrange how they could see their children, but
due to
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 the lack of correct words, they are now facing problems with each other. In conclusion, I strongly believe that talking to
people
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 and using body language and tone of voice helps to build interpersonal relationships, and
also
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 send the right message to others without being misunderstood.
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Consider expanding the discussion on the potential advantages of written communication. This will provide a more balanced view and strengthen the argument.
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Elaborate a bit more on the example about TED speakers versus YouTube speakers to clarify why the in-person interaction is significantly better.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Although the current transitions are logical, adding linking phrases could enhance the overall flow.
coherence cohesion
Strong introduction and conclusion, which clearly present the main argument.
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Main points are clearly supported with relevant examples, making the essay persuasive.
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Effective use of body language and tone of voice examples to illustrate the power of spoken communication.
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