You child is going on a school trip overseas for week. The Headmaster is looking for parents to join the trip. Write a letter to state that you would like to join it. In your letter: Mention why you would like to join the trip. Ask some general questions about the trip. Mention how you can be helpful

Dear sir, I hope you are keeping well, I am happy to inform you. I would like to join with an overseas trip.
Firstly
, I am doing a travel agency. so I have a lot of experience in overseas picnics. and our family members
also
live there. so I decided to join
this
trip. and I visited so many places.
such
as the National Musicum, and cultural events, I would like to share my experience with kids.
secondly
, let me know how many members are on
this
trip. and did you find any accommodations? If you are unable to do that, please inform me.
Additionally
, their daily needs are expensive.
such
as food and transport. please provide me with how to cover the cost?
finally
, I would like to contribute. especially, accommodation and transport. I have many contacts there. please reply me, soon as possible. Saman, faithfully.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure to proofread your letter for grammatical errors and sentence structures to improve clarity and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Try to clearly present one idea per paragraph to enhance the readability of your letter.
task achievement
Your response is fairly complete, but providing more specific details and clarity will improve task achievement.
suitable writing tone
You have maintained a polite and suitable tone throughout the letter.
complete response
You have addressed the main points required in the task – your interest in the trip, questions about it, and how you could be helpful.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural enrichment
  • educational experience
  • personal interest
  • itinerary
  • accommodation
  • roles and responsibilities
  • safety measures
  • emergency procedures
  • medical and disciplinary issues
  • first aid certification
  • language proficiency
  • volunteer experience
  • group management
  • supervision
  • schedule adherence
  • pre-trip preparations
  • post-trip follow-up
  • photo sharing
  • event recap
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