Plan A below shows a health centre in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The picture
indicate
the changes Change the verb form
indicates
of
Change preposition
in
health
centre
over 19 years from 2005 to Fix the agreement mistake
centres
these day
.
Change the determiner
this day
these days
Overall
, the health
centre
is converted a lot. Moreover
, there are amount of facilities added and demolish
.
Wrong verb form
demolished
To begin
with the health
care centre
in 2005, there were 3 rooms, two in
the left and Change preposition
on
right
of entrance
, Add an article
the entrance
last
Correct article usage
the last
room
was next to the room
in
the Change preposition
on
right
side of entrance
. Add an article
the entrance
Beside
that, there Replace the word
Besides
were
one Change the verb form
was
reception
desk at
the middle of the Change preposition
in
health
centre
. In addition
, the office ws
next to the Correct your spelling
was
reception
table at the left ride. Furthermore
, Correct article usage
the physiotheraphy
physiotheraphy
Correct your spelling
physiotherapy
room
was in the right
corner of health
care, behind the reception
table. Last
, there were
a car Change the verb form
was
parking
with 12 spaces and Replace the word
park
the
garden. There are 2 fences from left and Correct article usage
a
right
outside the entrance
.
Back to the present, more car parking are
added, from 12 spaces to 30 spaces. Change the verb form
is
Moreover
, there are more rooms and function rooms. The entrance
is replaced from the center
to the left side, the Change the spelling
centre
reception
desk is moved to rear
Add an article
the rear
entrance
and the children’s place area is added. The office room
and physiotherapy still remained. Furthermore
, there is new
minor operation Correct article usage
a new
room
in the left corner and between the office and the physiotherapy room
. Last
but not least, the garden isn’t demolish
and there are 2 fences moved to Change the verb form
isn’t demolished
isn’t demolishing
left
Add an article
the left
entrance
and right
via the car parking.Submitted by k2englishcenter on
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grammar
Revise the grammar to improve clarity and ensure sentences are complete and not fragmented. For example, 'Last, there were a car parking with 12 spaces and the garden' should be 'Lastly, there was a car park with 12 spaces and a garden.'
grammar
Ensure consistency in tense usage throughout the essay. For example, 'The entrance is replaced from the center to the left side’ should be 'The entrance has been replaced from the center to the left side.’
vocabulary
Use more varied vocabulary to make the writing more engaging and fluid. Switching up terms such as 'health centre' with synonyms like 'clinic' can add variety.
coherence
Link your sentences better for improved coherence. Use more transitional phrases like 'On the other hand' and 'In contrast to this' to show clear progression of ideas.
conclusion
Conclude your essay with a summary sentence that wraps up the main points discussed.
content
The essay mentions almost all relevant changes in the health center from 2005 to present, showing a comprehensive understanding of the task.
detail
The use of specific numbers and placement details such as 'more car parking are added, from 12 spaces to 30 spaces' showcases an effective inclusion of specific examples.
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