You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph presented portrays four countries of residence of overseas
students
in Australia.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that among the four countries,
students
choose Indonesia more often. In 1982 the only country in which
students
attended university was
Malaysia
at around 8000 of all the
students
overseas at that time.
This
count stayed more or less constant until 1990 when it suddenly increased to 20000
students
in
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8 year
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period until 1998. In 1984 some Australian residents started education in Indonesia. The student count in
this
country kept growing, overtook Hong Kong,
Malaysia
and Singapore in 1994 and ultimately reached the climax of around 26000
students
in 1998. During the following 2 years until
2000
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2000,
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this
number
dropped slightly to around 24000. Another similar tendency can be seen in Hong Kong, where the
number
of
students
exploded in a period of one year from none to 5 thousand
students
in 1987. Just like in
Indonesia
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this
number
kept rising in the following years peaking at 20000 undergraduates in 1997.
Malaysia
started receiving
students
from Australia in 1988(later than any of the four countries). The
number
of
students
in
Malaysia
,
however
, did not experience any decline and
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growing ever since. Reaching just below 20000 undergraduates in 2000.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas students
  • country of residence
  • main features
  • comparison
  • patterns
  • trends
  • economic factors
  • education quality
  • cultural ties
  • shift
  • anomalies
  • data
  • highest number
  • lowest number
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