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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In today's modernized era, the vast majority of
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world
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the world
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suffer
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suffers
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 from several environmental complications and they are doing their best to solve
it
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them
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.
While
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Certain
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certain
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 individuals hold the view that states around the
global
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globe
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 need to get over these problems
individuallly
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individually
, I totally disagree and I firmly believe that countries ought to deal with them as
a
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one nation.  First of all, many underprivileged areas cannot solve their
comlications
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complications
due to
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 their weak abilities.
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, a lot of states are lacking of cutting-edge technology which is necessary in
currant
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current
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 life to manage these environmental issues.
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, certain countries do not have enough money not just to fund eco-friendly organisations and
do
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 some steps
forwards
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 to get rid of pollution but
also
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 to
live
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 their population
in
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 minimum
life
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 standards.
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, African countries that suffer from
sever
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severe
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poverity
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poverty
, they will definitely need an
abroud
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abroad
 help in order to achieve the
glabal
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global
 green goals.
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, international problems that
appeared
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 and lead to
a pervasive detrimental impacts
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pervasive detrimental impacts
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 cannot be solved nationally. Nowadays,
problem
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a problem
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 like pollution is a result of many awful policies from nations that neglect the
world
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's environment.
Cosequently
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Consequently
, polluters
such
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 as factories and fossil fuel cars will continue with their deterioration behaviours unless governments decide to change their rules. One marvels illustration of
that is
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 when the
united
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 nation
curb
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 the
world
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businesses
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business
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 behaviours and
force
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forced
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 them to run their products with eco-friendly energy.
To sum up
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, as we have seen,
world
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 issues ought to be
delt
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dealt
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globally
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with globally
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 and both governments and societies are accountable for them.

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task achievement
Try to avoid spelling and grammatical mistakes, such as 'currant' instead of 'current' and 'poverity' instead of 'poverty'. These can make your ideas harder to understand.
task achievement
Your ideas are clear, but make sure to provide more specific and detailed examples to support your points. This can strengthen your argument and make it more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a logical flow throughout the essay, especially between paragraphs. Ensure each paragraph connects smoothly to the next with appropriate linking words or phrases.
coherence cohesion
Work on providing a clearer distinction and organization between different views. Each main point should have its own paragraph for better readability and coherence.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your argument effectively.
task achievement
Your essay addresses both views and provides your own opinion, fulfilling the task requirements.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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