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The graph below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 to 2014.

The graph below shows the annual visitor spend for visitors to New Zealand from 5 countries for the years 1996 to 2014.
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The bar chart provides information about the top ten markets for processed food exports from the US for
last
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 year and six years ago. We can see from the graph that the US processed food export industry has experienced
overall
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 growth.
Additionally
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, major markets like Canada, Mexico and The European Union accounted for the largest share of the world economy ,
while
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 other regions showed moderate progress. Canada’s exports rose from 9.3
billion
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 US
dollars
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 to 13.2
billion
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last
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 year, maintaining its top position. Mexico
also
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 saw a boost from four to six
billion
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 US
dollars
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. The European Union remained an important market with a slight increase from 2.6 to 4.4. Vise versa,
Hong
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the Hong
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 Kong market became the lowest in the world with a modest gain from 0.3 to 0.8
billions
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billion
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. Other countries,
such
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 as Japan, South Korea, China and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 showed minor differences. Australia’s exports
enhanced
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increased
show examples
 marginally from 0.3 to 1.0
billion
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dollars
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 like Hong Kong. The total output of the rest of the world
also
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 grew from 6.3 to 11.0
billion
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 US
dollars
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, suggesting an expansion in global demand.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual expenditure
  • tourism revenue
  • spending trends
  • economic impact
  • visitor spend
  • tourism sector
  • peak spending
  • fluctuations
  • incline/decline in spending
  • monetary contribution
  • tourist demographics
  • economic conditions
  • tourism campaigns
  • statistical analysis
  • data interpretation
  • fiscal year
  • extrapolate data
  • spending patterns
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