The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999 . Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below .

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The graph line illustrates the proportion of unemployment in the US and Japan from

March

1993 to

March

1999.

Overall

, both countries met at the same

rate

which were around 5.3% in

March

98 and steadily

decrease

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decreased

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to 5% in

March

99%.

According to

the line

graph

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graph,

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the percentage of work

force

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workforce

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in Japan during

March

were

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was

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the

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its

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lowest point

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2.5 per cent.

Then

, it started to

went

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up slightly till it reached about 3.7% in

March

94, After that the

rate

continued to

rose

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rise

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respectively and reached around 4.3 per cent in

March

96.

Finally

, the

rate

decreased slightly to a little less than 4%

then

started to improve slowly till it reached 4.5% in

March

98. It is interesting to note that the

rate

in the US

was peak

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peaked

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7% in

March

then

it started to

fell

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fall

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slowly to 6.5% in Mar 94 following that

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apply

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fluctuate

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fluctuated

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till it reached 5.5% in

March

then

it increased a little bit and kept fluctuate till it reached just over 5% in

March

97.

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179 words

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