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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999 .  Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below .

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999 .  Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below .
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The graph line illustrates the proportion of unemployment in the US and Japan from
March
 1993 to
March
 1999.
Overall
, both countries met at the same
rate
 which were around 5.3% in
March
 98 and steadily
decrease
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decreased
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 to 5% in
March
 99%.
According to
 the line
graph
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graph,
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 the percentage of work
force
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workforce
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 in Japan during
March
 93
were
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was
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 at
the
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its
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 lowest point
by
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at
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 2.5 per cent.
Then
, it started to
went
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go
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 up slightly till it reached about 3.7% in
March
 94, After that the
rate
 continued to
rose
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rise
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 respectively and  reached around 4.3 per cent in
March
 96.
Finally
, the
rate
 decreased slightly to a little less than 4%
then
 started to improve slowly till it reached 4.5% in
March
 98. It is interesting to note that the
rate
 in the US
was peak
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peaked
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by
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at
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 7% in
March
 93
then
 it started to
fell
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fall
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 slowly to 6.5% in Mar 94 following that
a
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apply
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fluctuate
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fluctuated
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 till it reached 5.5% in
March
 95
then
 it increased a little bit and kept fluctuate till it reached just over 5% in
March
 97.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words march, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rates
  • graph
  • trend
  • changes
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • findings
  • observations
  • data
  • statistics
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