Demand of food is increasing worldwide. What are the causes of this? What measures can the international community take tomakevsure the food supply is enough?

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Some years ago, products were in sufficient amounts and people eventually did not worry about a possible shortage. Nowadays food demand is gradually rising.

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increasing population and climate change can be solved by stopping some harmful activities to the environment, and

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growers' capacities. The population gradually increased all across the world reaching about five billion by 2023.

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consumers

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and the pressure on amounts must follow the tendency of

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growth.

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climate change is one serious issue people must face to en

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph clearly addresses a specific aspect of the topic to enhance logical structure. For instance, dedicate one paragraph to discussing population increase and another to climate change.

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Provide more relevant and specific examples to support your points. This can help in making the argument more comprehensive and convincing.

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Work on expanding your ideas more clearly and comprehensively. This will help in fully addressing the question and achieving a higher score in both task achievement and coherence.

task achievement

You have identified two main causes of increasing food demand: population growth and climate change, which are relevant and appropriate.

coherence cohesion

You’ve attempted to structure your essay with an introduction and main points, which shows good understanding of essay structure.

coherence cohesion

Your language use is fairly effective, and you’ve made an effort to utilize a range of vocabulary.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

94 words

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Demand of food is increasing worldwide. What are the causes of this? What measures can the international community take tomakevsure the food supply is enough?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Nowadays, some parents pressure their children to be successful in a specific field. What are the reasons for this? Is it negative or positive?

The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

#4 Children engaged in sport are often overloaded with physical activity or get serious traumas. What are the main reasons for this? What solutions can you suggest?

Some say that music, art, and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level. Do you agree or disagree?