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The overuse of natural resources cause an ultimate exhaust of them. People have been using them to be in swim of new styles such as making new furniture of recent design. This causes a huge harm to the environment. Therefore, the government should discourage people the overuse of this resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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In today's time, natural
resources
 are very important for human life and every living being should focus on saving more and more natural
resources
 for future generations. But nowadays certain tribes are becoming selfish as they want to
use
 natural vices all by themselves. In my opinion, natural
resources
 should be saved for the upcoming generation. It is an undeniable fact that natural
resources
 are very limited and can be very helpful for both the
people
 and the living organisms on
this
 earth. To simplify, natural
resources
 are very convenient to
use
 as they make the job much easier with the help of It.
Moreover
,
people
 can make different types of products with the help of natural
resources
.
For example
,
people
 make different types of art forms with the help of wood, which is a natural resource.
As a result
,
people
 should
use
 natural
resources
 in a limited way
On the other hand
, deforestation can cause global warming and create a very high temperature in certain areas of the country.To Elaborate, using all the natural
resources
 can be dangerous in the current scenario as it can lead to the extension of all the natural
resources
as well as
 fossil fuels.
for instance
, an article in the Times of India says that in the upcoming 70 ,years all the natural
resources
 will be exhausted and there will be no natural
resources
 available for humans.
Thus
, it is very important for humankind to utilise the
resources
 properly and save for the upcoming generation.
To conclude
,
People
 should not overuse natural
resources
 because it is only for a limited period of time and I strongly believe that making excessive Furniture, which is of no
use
 should be stopped as it can lead to deforestation and oxygen for living organisms.
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