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You are experiencing financial problems and want to ask your landlord if you can pay your rent late. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter explain: •Why you cannot pay the rent •When you will pay the rent. •How you will ensure you can pay your rent in the future

#landlord #rent #•why #•when #•how #future
Dear Mr. Amini I would like to request that you
could
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give me some time to pay my rent. Unfortunately, I am facing some problems which have put me in a severe financial situation. I have been working at ATS Company for eight years but my manager passed away
last
 month which caused great chaos in the office and the new manager had to shut down the whole company. Because they had to give their debt to the bank, so they were not able to pay our salaries. I would pay my whole rent
at the end
 of January, the company
promise
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 to pay my salary after the vacation and I will get the cheque immediately after Christmas. I have already sent my CV to some companies and one of them become interested in my work. Next Monday I am going to sign a two-year contract with them which means I am able to pay your rent on time for the next two years. Yours Sincerely, Negar Sedigh
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coherence cohesion
To further improve coherence, consider linking your paragraphs with transitional phrases or sentences.
task achievement
Ensure your future letters provide a bit more detail about your future financial plans to fully satisfy the task requirement.
task achievement
Your letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is essential for such requests.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured and flows logically from one point to the next.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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