The pie chart show the reasons for immigrants to Euopean country in 2009 and reasons for immigrants from a European country in 2009.

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The given pie charts illustrate the main reasoning as to why extraneous travel to

European

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Europe

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plus the individuals provincial to

another

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other

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coutries

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countries

in 2009. From an observational

persective

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perspective

, it is clearly shown that newcomers from the

European

Union make a large portion of

definit

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definite

job

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jobs

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while

they account for the smallest rate in

study

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the study

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and

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for no

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reason. With regards to the average

percent

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percentage

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of Settle to a

European

Country, where accompany and family

has

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have

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been the largest fragment at 25%, respectively, Definite

job

also

has significant levels, at

aroun

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around

23%. Looking for a

job

, studying and others are taking the same chunk at 15%. The people

enter

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who enter

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with no reason saw the rates under a quarter, at

confirmly

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confirmed

7%.

Taking

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Take

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a look at the commission of settlers from

European

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Europe

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which is put into the six intellect. Definite

job

comprise

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comprises

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at the majority with 35%, highest extra in any reason.

Following

this

was other sanities at 23%

while

the remaining categories were accompany/family

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