the line graph below shows how much people in four countries spent on purchasing books from 1995 to 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the the main features and make comparisons where relevant

the line graph below shows how much people in four countries spent on purchasing books from 1995 to 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the the main features and make comparisons where relevant
Contained in the line graph is information pertaining
the
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number of people who take money (
million
) to buy
books
during 10 years that started in 1995 and finished in 2005. In general,
it is clear that
Germans bought
books
the most, and next is France and Italy which went up and down several times.
Additionally
, there was a significant change when Australia reached the third position
at the end
of the period from the lowest rate. Looking at the graph in
further
detail, book sales figures in Australia which reached the highest point over the period
,
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rose gradually from 80
million
(in1995) to 90
million
(in1999),
then
, declined slightly and had an increase in 2005 until about 95
million
.
Furthermore
, the money that Australians spent on buying
books
had a significant change when it was the lowest point in 1995 and reached the third in 2005. Moving onto the remaining statistic, there were some slight shifts in France and Italy regarding the amount of money that customers take to purchase their
books
. What is more, France held the second during 10 years,
whereas
, Italy fell to the lowest rate
at the end
.
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