The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course
The bar chart and pie chart illustrate the number of males and females who joined different evening classes at an institution which belongs to adults and
also
the range of their
age
in 2009.
Overall
, it can be seen that the sculpture is the least favourable course in comparison with others and most of the attendants are over 50.
according to
the data, the language class was the most popular class for women with 40 women followed by the painting with 30 and the drama with
the
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20 female individuals
as well as
the sculpture class which attracted around 5% of women.
In addition
, the painting was absorbed by approximately 25% of men and the second place belonged to the language with 20 male students.
this
number was 10 for both the drama and the sculpture courses for the male group. In terms of
age
, apparently, older people were keener than
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younger ones. 42% of the over-50
age
group tended to join the institution.
this
number was 26%, 16%, 11% and 5% for the 40-49, 30-39, 20-29 and the
age
under 20 respectively.
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