A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter - explain why you want to do volunary/unpaid work at the museum - describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful - give details of when you would be available for work
Dear Sir,
I am writing to express that I really want to get
this
job in museum. I am an
university sophomore student. I want to use Change the article
a
out of class
time to gain some social experiences. The main Add a hyphen
out-of-class
reasons
is that my major is art appreciation, and I can get Fix the agreement mistake
reason
early
touch to Add an article
an early
the early
work
about
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on
arts
. At the same time, I learned that Fix the agreement mistake
art
this
is not a full-time
Remove the article
full-time work
a full-time job
work
, so I think this
job is extremely suitable me
. As Change preposition
for me
sometime
I need to take lessons at school.
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sometimes
Moreover
, my major is greatly suitable for this
work
, because I hold more professional knowledges
. Meanwhile, I always keep energy and passion for my job. Change the wording
knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
Furthermore
, If you trust me and hive
me Correct your spelling
give
this
part-time voluntary work
, I will do my best to complete the task you have give
me. At the same moment, my home is very close to the museum, if there are any problems here, I can often come to support you.
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given
Finally
, I am looking forward to you
thinking, and if you have any Correct pronoun usage
your
further
information, please do not hesitate to contact me.
Correct the word
Yours
Your
faithfully,
Xiyue TangCorrect your spelling
Yours
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence, ensure each paragraph flows logically to the next. Using transitional phrases can help maintain the continuity of ideas.
general
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and the use of articles. For instance, 'get early touch to work about arts' can be better phrased as 'gain early experience working with art.'
task achievement
Include specific examples of your skills and experiences. For example, mention any previous volunteer work or specific artistic skills relevant to a museum environment.
task achievement
Your motivation for wanting to volunteer at the museum is clearly explained, particularly your desire to gain social experience and the relevance to your major.
task achievement
You have mentioned your availability and location, which are important details for the director to consider.