A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter - explain why you want to do volunary/unpaid work at the museum - describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful - give details of when you would be available for work

Dear Sir, I am writing to express that I really want to get
this
job in museum. I am
an
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university sophomore student. I want to use
out of class
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time to gain some social experiences. The main
reasons
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is that my major is art appreciation, and I can get
early
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an early
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touch to
work
about
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arts
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. At the same time, I learned that
this
is not
a full-time
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full-time work
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work
, so I think
this
job is extremely suitable
me
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. As
sometime
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I need to take lessons at school.
Moreover
, my major is greatly suitable for
this
work
, because I hold more professional
knowledges
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knowledge
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. Meanwhile, I always keep energy and passion for my job.
Furthermore
, If you trust me and
hive
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give
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me
this
part-time voluntary
work
, I will do my best to complete the task you have
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me. At the same moment, my home is very close to the museum, if there are any problems here, I can often come to support you.
Finally
, I am looking forward to
you
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thinking, and if you have any
further
information, please do not hesitate to contact me.
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faithfully, Xiyue Tang
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence, ensure each paragraph flows logically to the next. Using transitional phrases can help maintain the continuity of ideas.
general
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and the use of articles. For instance, 'get early touch to work about arts' can be better phrased as 'gain early experience working with art.'
task achievement
Include specific examples of your skills and experiences. For example, mention any previous volunteer work or specific artistic skills relevant to a museum environment.
task achievement
Your motivation for wanting to volunteer at the museum is clearly explained, particularly your desire to gain social experience and the relevance to your major.
task achievement
You have mentioned your availability and location, which are important details for the director to consider.

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